Thank you for the list.  It was a good one and we should review it now and again.
I will add another suggestion that helps me.
Limit paragraph size.  Set a criterion for yourself and trim until the thought is expressed within the limit allowed.  I try to limit it to six sentences per paragraph and try to get down to four if I can.  There are a few occasions when I can't figure out how to reduce it to the limited number, but not many.  I think that any more than eight sentences in a paragraph are too many.
I'm sure that if I reviewed all my work I would find some instances that I broke this rule, but I do try to stick to it.
Adopting this discipline results in a much tighter piece of writing while expressing the author's thoughts.  Sometimes an author believes that he/she has written a perfect passage and can't bear to slice and dice any of it.  Many times a critical rereading of it reveals that there is a lot of telling and not showing.  
      Yeah. The story should flow, not read like an instruction manual.  
      Yeah. The story should flow, not read like an instruction manual.